Barfoot and Thompson Young Authors Writing Competition: Read some of the amazing texts by our year 5 and 6 team of young GHS authors

 

Kindness Can Change The World

 

Walking through the school, Aria couldn’t help but feel like everyone’s attention was on her. 

 “Why’s everyone staring at me?” Aria wondered. Lilly, Aria’s friend, panicked, “Sorry, we just can’t be friends anymore.” 

 Aria ran away from school, her eyes filled with tears, everyone was whispering, some girls were even laughing. 

She slammed her bedroom door “What did I do to deserve this? Why was everybody so mean to me?” Aria said to herself. Silent tears rolled down from her cheeks, dripping to her knees. To cheer herself up, she scrolled through her phone, but she only found hatred-filled comments from her peers. Soft arms wrapped around her waist. “Are you ok?” Aria’s Mother asked. “Please just leave me alone”, Aria wept.

 Several days later Aria walked back into school, seeing everyone made her anxious. 

 Ring, Ring! 

Everyone sprinted to class. Aria’s heart was beating as fast as the speed of light. Mrs. Claire was teaching the class that day. 

“Everyone, we have a new classmate”, shouted Mrs Claire. A tall girl with blonde hair came into the classroom. People shouted, “Sit with me!” 

But instead she sat with Aria.

Someone whispered. “Why’s she sitting with Aria, hasn't she seen our comments online?”

 “Hi, my name's Violet.” The girl grinned. “What’s your name?” “Aria.” Aria responded, “Why don’t you hate me?”

“I don’t believe what lying bullies say.” Violet said.

“Thanks,” Aria smiled.

“Can you be my first friend?” Violet asked.

Aria replied, “Sure, and thanks for making the world a better place.”

By Arisa Room 24

 

 

 

The Power of My Words

 “Nee-naw”. I woke up to the sound of sirens. 

 “Wake up honey”, shouted my mum from the kitchen. As I rushed to the kitchen my mum was watching TV. There was a man in heavy armour babbling on about something. 

 Stuffing toast in my mouth, I rushed out the door and tripped over my shoelaces.  As I fell, time seemed to slow down and a small, solid, green blob that seemed to have two human hands appeared in my field of vision. It jumped up and nipped me. 

 Weird images flashed around in my head and I knew all of a sudden that I would be able to say something and it would become reality. As I woke up I felt really woozy, so I sat down. Remembering the vision, I saw a piece of plastic. I wondered, if I said, “Get rid of plastic!” would it disappear? I decided to do it anyway and the moment I said it, POOF, the plastic was gone. I nearly fell over with shock. Running home I leaped onto my bed and fell asleep. 

 “Nee-naw”. I woke up to the sound of sirens. “Wake up honey” shouted my mum from the kitchen. As I rushed to the kitchen my mum was watching the TV. There was a man in heavy armour babbling on about something. This all seemed strangely familiar.  

 

The end?

 By Conrad Room 25

The Great Discovery

I was in the middle of a storm, and my  explorer yacht hit trouble then started to sink. I sent out an S.O.S call, put on my scuba gear and dived into the rough ocean, deeper and deeper I swam into the deep sea.

 In front of me was a dark underwater cave, I swam towards it with my  light turned on. The cave looked like it would never end. After swimming for a while,  I was running out of oxygen. As I traveled  further I could see an air pocket. I felt relieved as I took a breath. 

 In the distance I could see something strange. I swam towards it. It looked like a normal piece of seaweed, but it was blue and felt hard like plastic, then I noticed it was growing all over the walls of the cave. I took a sample of this fantastic find.

 I wonder if I could use this to change the world?

 I need to get out of here and get back to the laboratory to experiment with my new discovery. All of a sudden I could see flashing lights. It was the rescue party, they tracked my signal. 

 Back at the laboratory I tested the seaweed and found it had similar properties as plastic although it is a natural product. This will be an amazing result for the natural environment and the world.

 I shouted and jumped in the air as I realized that plastic could be replaced forever.

 By Jamie Room 25

 

Five Wishes

I woke up from the cold breeze of a peculiar, exciting, sunny morning, I sat up in my unorganized, cozy bed, with a big roaring yawn. I was exhausted. My eyes hurt. I had been staring at the screen of my computer for hours the day before. No idea if anybody had tried to talk to me at all. School had been a nightmare, doing heaps of work - oh how I wished I could change my life. Everyday I’d say to myself “please, let me change the world for at least one day,”

 And suddenly, that one wish came true. An old looking note was on my bedside table, reading out “You may change the world how you wish for a day - unknown” I was confused. It couldn’t possibly be real, right? Probably a prank from my sisters. I had to test it. 

 “I wish students could pick the subjects they learn,” I said quietly. An unexpected gust of wind blew past me- filling the room all of the sudden with warmth. I felt nothing different. 

 “Yeah, it’s probably a prank.” I said in my mind. But when I went to school I was surprised with my teacher exclaiming, “Hello Jemma, so, there’s a new rule in the school! You can pick your subjects.  Would you like to pick your subjects for today?” I chose writing and art. I got so worked up, I nearly fell over.

 Later, I got carried away. “I wish to end world hunger and crimes,” A gust of wind blew past. It made the classroom very cold this time. “I should wait until after school for the next wish.”I said in my head. 

 Just then, I felt a brush against my foot. It was another note. I picked it up, and read out loud, "You only get 5 wishes." I had already got 3. After school, as I started walking home, I whispered, "I wish to have world peace and clean up all litter!”

 The note disappeared, as it counted as litter.. 

 "Hmmm.. I should really think this through, I mean, what if I wish for the wrong thing? I might waste my last wish!” I over thought. “I guess I could… I wish everyone was nice and never bullied!" I exclaimed to the now fun and peaceful earth. Just then I saw a teenager stop their friends to help an elderly cross the road. And that is how I changed the world!

 By Jemma Room 27

 

Pollution.

 

BEEP my alarm clock went. I slowly dragged myself out of bed and went to the table. My parents had both left for a work trip so I was home alone for the weekend. I pulled out some cereal and ate it before laying down on the couch. As I scrolled through videos, I saw countless people celebrating something.

 “Everyone in the comments seemed to know why, why don't I?”, I said to myself. I commented about it, waiting for an answer, but no one told me. I was genuinely confused, I literally just woke up and I had no idea what was going on. I sighed, got up and put on my jacket before deciding to go for a walk.

 As I walked outside, the scent of summer hung in the air.  For some reason, it felt more peaceful than it had done the day before. I took a look around to see what was going on and realised that my neighbourhood, which used to be polluted, was now clean and so fresh and healthy. Before, chip bags and trash bags had been blown by the wind, but now all I saw was leaves. 

“What on earth is going on?”, I thought to myself. I heard my phone ping inside my pocket. As I looked, someone had replied to my comment.

“There’s no more pollution, somebody started a charity, they eventually got more helpers from across the world and now it's really successful.”

By Mia Room 26

 

 

 

Animal Adoption Day at Madeline

 The second the wind chimes are audible across campus, the school day at Madeline Girls College begins. I'm generally typing up all the subject forms, authorization slips, and various documents at this time in my office, which is perched atop an oak tree. Due to Animal Adoption Day, today was the exception. Every year, on Adoption Day, students receive their brand-new pet. Typically, these include animals like cats, dogs, hamsters, rabbits, and guinea pigs. However, this year, we've added some additional options, including horses, goats, axolotls and lizards. 

 

I was genially making my way to the Animalia Department when I spotted various students making an effort to be the first there. My heart raced as I felt a sense of anticipation in the air.

 

"So, what exactly is this 'Animal Adoption Day’ all about, Principal Quartz?" Ms. Chesman, the new teacher, asked a few minutes later.

“Well, it’s all about getting kids to be kinder, less selfish and more responsible. You see, when we founded the school, we figured it would be the easiest way to change some people in this world." I answered happily, I was extremely proud of this system. 

“I see…” Ms Chesman replied in thought.

“Have you ever considered the hygiene status of this ‘programme’” she added.

“Seems perfectly fine to me”.

“Well, you're the principal…” Ms. Chesman said, sounding unconvinced.

“Though maybe not a very good one” this comment made it clear that she was not the animal type.

 

Some people you just couldn’t change.

By Miette Room 23

 

 

Making a Difference

 Mist embraced the cold city, a warning that winter was coming. A beam of odd sunlight danced on Chloe's face. She woke up. Chloe lazily wandered to the kitchen and peered out the window. Her eyes rested on her favourite tree, a tall tree on the other side of the road. The trees swayed as the screeching, deadly noise snarled from the forest. The last leaf fell from its now barren crown, as the tree dropped down to the ground, right in front of Chloe’s eyes, which were now full of tears.

 “NO!” She cried. She screamed and ran out, hoping to help the tree.

 “Dear, why are you crying?” Mrs Berry, Chloe’s old neighbour, asked softly. She turned her wrinkly kind face towards Chloe, an inquiring look in her dull-grey eyes. 

“That…that tree”

Mrs. Berry frowned, “I know dear! A bunch of morons they are! We need the community to save our town!”

Chloe eyes shone.

“I know what to do!”      

They walked a long way until reaching a small house. They knocked.

“Yes?” A girlish voice squeaked. A tall, skinny woman opened the door.

 “Aunty Lila. The tree!” Chloe cried.

Lila rushed back into the house.

She came back with six kids, shovels and pots with plants in their arms.

“We are ready to make a difference!” 

 

“What are you doing?” Mr. Jim asked.

“Planting tr- I mean, saving the world!” A kid answered.

Mr. Jim nodded, “My kids will love to help!”

Chloe smiled.

“That’s Perfect!”

By Vika Room 24

We spent a lot of time working on sentence structure and great vocabulary choices in our year 3 and 4 ESOL groups - the writing is coming along beautifully because of it :)

I said, "Pass it to me!" I saw the water balloon coming towards me. I caught it, but it slipped out of my hands. Whe it hit the ground, it popped. All the water came on me! But who cares? The game was fun.

I grabbed another water balloon and I said, Who wants another turn?"

By Alex Room 17

Two weeks ago we played catch the water balloon and it was super fun! We caught all the balloons, but sometimes they popped. it sloshed on me, but it was funny. Jota aimed at my face, but it missed me.

By Pamith Room 18

We were playing with water balloons. He passed it to me. It gushed, because it popped. A flood came out. Are you wet? I am so wet.

By Tarush, Room 19

In the beginning of the term we played with water balloons. We played water balloons outside with the ESOL group. The water balloons were very slippery. I couldn't catch them all, because they were slippery.

First Mrs Goodall explained that we needed to take turns. Then the wet balloons burst in my hand. But the balloon sploshed in my hand. So I threw it to someone else. I was so excited! It was really fun.

By Marcella, Room 8

The balloon was very shiny. I was so excited. The game was fun. The water spurted and it was fun, but something happened and it popped.

By Katalina, Room 21 

On Tuesday my ESOL group played with water bombs. We played outside the ESOL class. We played it, so we can do a recount. But it was so fun, because we were throwing them, but some of them were popping. Splash! Splosh! Whoosh!

By Jota, Room 21

On Tuesday my ESOL room played with water bombs. The big water bomb popped really early, but the little water bombs didn't pop. I couldn't really catch them. It was really slippery, that's why I couldn't catch them, but I didn't get wet.

By Ivy Room 21

We were at school playing with very colourful water bombs. They were shiny, because there was water in it. We were playing catch with water balloons, but the water balloons were slippery and slidy.

It was exciting and fun. When we were finishing, we still had a few of them, so we were squirting them into the soggy bucket.

By Andrej, Room 7

Before the game started Mrs Goodall explained the rules. We needed to take turns. The slippery, colourful balloon was flying to me, but it missed me. I was nervous, because I didn't want to get wet. Later in the game I caught a water balloon.

By Veronica, Room 20

I'm all wet!!! Urrgh!!! Stop throwing the water balloons at me! Mrs Goodall is going to let us write about this and I hate writing, because we always run out of time. 

The water balloons are colourful and shiny - URGH! Didn't I say, "Stop throwing, the, water, balloons, at, me!!!!! 

We were playing water balloons outside, beside the ESOL room.

Stomp! Splash! Squeeze!! Well, (sorry, readers - this is when Grace ran out of time, my aplogies, Mrs Goodall)

By Grace, Room 17

Room 20 created amazing moments in time pieces about a volcanic eruption. Here are a few amazing examples.

Deadly lava rolls down the volcano. BOOM! The lava hits the water. SPLASH! Peoplle scream in terror as the lava rushes down the volcano.

The sky turns black as the smoke covers the sky. People are horrified. I wonder how many volcanoes erupt a year?

Flaming, blazing hot magma flows down the huge volcano, as the cloudy smoke fills the sky. BOOM! The lava gets launched out like water in a sprinkler. People scream in terror as their village gets obliterated by the scorching hot lava. Blasting up the glowing lava turns the sky crimson while it illuminates the surrounding valley. Steaming the crystal clear lake boils while the pitch black ashes of the village blow away. I wonder how volcanoes are created.

Burning hot lava drooling fast as a tidal wave. Bright as the sun lava flows out of the volcano ash as a blanket covers everything around. I feel sad for any people who died in an exploding volcano.

Blasting lava quickly rises up into the gloomy sky. Bright glowing lights surround the top of the volcano, when the lava hits the water. BOOM! I wonder how the volcano erupts.

The new history curriculum reflected in our talented year 2 writing: Room 12 shares their knowledge about the moa

 

Another magic piece by a Gulf Harbour author - enjoy, dear readers!

 A Cold Windy Morning

It was a cold windy morning 

I was walking through the forest.  

A blinding light shone through the dancing trees

I walked cautiously toward it 

I got to the light 

Standing there before me was a gigantic tree curving over me

I stared at it as if I was frozen

I slowly moved toward the tree and carefully put my hand on it 

The tree started to glow like the sun

There was a flash and I ended up back in my bedroom

My head was spinning and I felt really faint 

I was so disappointed that I could not see what other wonders lay in the magical tree

By Ella

Enjoy these fantastic descriptive pieces by our room 17 writers. We have to be thankful for the thunderstorm - it prompted amazing pieces :)

 

The weather is stormy. It goes booming and crashing and the flashing is pink. Cassie

Lightning went zooming down with strong crashing rain. When the teacher was doing the roll, thunder crashed around. 

Jano

 It flashed blue! Then there was a boom! It was noisy! The sky lit up!

Sophie

 Suddenly I was woken up by the bang, boom and smash. My heart was pounding. It was crackling in the sky. I was afraid. It felt like I was falling off a huge cliff. 

Connor

When the big lightening came, I felt scared and I covered my ears.

Maya 

It was raining. Thunder cracked in the sky. Lightening flickered and the wind howled! Everything was silent. Only the soaking rain flickered through the howling wind. Then I heard lightning boom again. I skipped a heart beat. It was stormy weather. My shoes were soaked. Everything was thundery and rainy!

Mila 

 

When I woke up I heard thunder and lightning. The thunder was louder than 70 elephants. A loud sound boomed and crashed on my roof. The thunder storm was loud!

Jamie

This morning I was having breakfast when the lights started flickering and then it started pouring with rain . There was booming thunder and flashing lightning. 

Hudson

 The noisy thunder was very loud. The strong lightning could make fire. Lightning can kill!

Alec 

This morning when I went to school there was a surprising, striking flash of lightning.

 Ari

The clapping thunder echoed through the sky. The air was stuffy and clouds filled the sky. The rain crashed down. I saw flickering lightning light up the stormy day. I was drenched by the time I got to my classroom.

Hazel

 

The lightening was cool. I loved it. I went outside. It was raining fast. I got a big fright.

Sophie

There was lightning and loud thunder. Dark thunder boomed down. The rain hailed down from the sky. It got me soaking wet.

Blake  

This morning the lightning and thunder woke me up! When I was having breakfast I heard thunder. My heart was pounding and the hammering rain just went on and on! When I went to the car I sprinted to it but I got soaking wet. I was really cold. I tried to stay under the shelter to get to class.

Logan

The Thunderstorm - Year 2 ESOL group

 I typed up the texts by these incredibly talented year 2 English language learners and fixed a few little spelling mistakes. All the wonderful words and sentences were created independently though. 

The thunder clouds covered the sky. I thought it was midnight. My mum was waking up because of the thunder. When my mum woke, she thought it was midnight too. Then she looked at her phone. It was actually seven o'clock. The thunder sounded like an explosion. I like the thunder. But everybody else is scared of the thunder. When my friend is sharing her news when she said about the thunder, the thunder suddemly boomed loudly. My sister was not scared too.

By Grace, room 10

I hear the thunder. Lightning is like a flash. The sky is dark. The thunder is rumbling.

By Ricky, room 10

The pond was filling up this morning because of the rain. The rain was heavy. It was hitting my roof. I didn't really like this morning. The thunder sounded like a dragon breathing fire. The sky was black. The clouds were shutting out the light.

By Leveke, room 11

The thunder sounded like a dragon breathing fire. The pond was filling up with water. Lightning lit up my room. The sky was dark.

By Jona, room 11